You are interested in applying for a new position at your company but have some questions. Write a letter to you boss. In your letter include: Which position you are considering What questions you have about it How your boss can help you decide whether or not to apply

Dear

Mr.

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Roy, I am writing

this

letter in relation to the vacancy that emerged recently in our organisation. I came to know about the opening through the HR team. When I did cross-check the job description I really thought that It completely matches

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apply

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my profile. The

role

is for HR coordinator of

MEP

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the MEP

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team at

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Infopark

Inforpark

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branch. Though the opportunity seems to be quite catchy, I have some doubts relating to it. It has been stated in the job ad that the contracted fortnightly hours

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30 hours, which seems quite less for the

role

, as it's

quite

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demanding job.

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, the posting is at

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quite a

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busy location, which would rather require a long commute time.

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, travel allowance has not been mentioned. Even though I have certain questions in my mind for the

role

. I do certainly think that I would make a suitable candidate for

this

position, as I am working as

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an HR

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administrator at the moment. I would be really thankful to you

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if you would consider my profile and give me

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advice

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any

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advice on it. If I should apply for

this

role

or not. I hope to hear from you soon regarding

this

. Yours sincerely, Neethu Babu

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

203 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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