Some people get into debt by buying thing they don’t need and can’t afford. What is the reason for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

In today’s societies, countless
people
carry debt because they
are keep
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buying
useless
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thing
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or they
have
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not enough
money
to earn
it
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them
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. The main cause of
this
behavior
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could be
from
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an irresistible habit from human instinct.
However
, a solution that can release
this
problem would be
recording
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a recording
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of
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incomes
and expenses. The basic human instinct tends to lead us toward
the
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negative thought. Whenever
people
go to a shopping mall, they seem to have a payment on something
such
as
foods
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, drink and clothes. Especially, when their eyes capture the price tag with the big red number which means those things are on sale.
For example
, in most
of
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department
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stores in Thailand, the rate of products
purchasing
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by consumers will be rise significantly whenever the entrepreneurs use the price reduction strategy like midnight sales or end-year
sale
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. To solve
this
problem, one
of
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a
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concrete way is actively taking
a
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note of the revenue and outgoings per
month
, which will make
people
realize how much
money
they have already spent on that
month
or whether the expenses exceed the
incomes
or not.
For instance
,
Last
year my close friend always spent
to
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much
money
on
the
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cosmetic products.
However
, she still had to pay for the rental house,
therefore
, I had to lend her some cash every single
month
.
Nevertheless
, since
last
month
, she has discovered the way to be free of debt which is to record the expenditures and
incomes
. Now, she has already returned all my
money
back. Because of
this
solution, it will make
people
think before spending their
money
. In conclusion,
although
the factor that influences
people
to purchase
thing
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more than needed is their basic instinct,
people
can solve
this
problem by keep taking note
about
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the
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their
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incomes
and expenses.
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