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percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity: 2010

#percentage #australian #men #women #activity
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proportion
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 of
men
 and women of different
age
group
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groups
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 doing exercise in the year 2010 in Australia. Overall, in
male
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the male
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 category,
men
 under 25
years
 of
age
 were doing more physical activity than
other
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another age group
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age
group
.
Similarly
, women
belongs
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 to
45
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the 45
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 to 54
years
age
group
 were doing more exercise than other
age
agroup
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groups
.
Furthermore
, women were focusing more on fitness as compared to
men
. In the given period, under 25
years
 of
age
 52.8%
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of male
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male
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males
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 were doing regular exercise which
further
 reduced to 39.5% for
35
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the 35
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 to 44
years
age
group
. After that, there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in percentage and at 65 and
over ages
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overages
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 46.7%
men
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of men
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 were doing that.
On the other hand
, under 25
years
 of
age
 47.7%
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of female
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female
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females
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 were doing
physical
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a physical
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 activity which was gradually increased to
peak
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a peak
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 of 53.3%
at
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in
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45
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the 45
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 to 54
age
group
 ,before
dropped
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 down to 47.1% at 65 and
over ages
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overages
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.
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