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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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It is indeed interesting to know that you are planning for a camping
holiday
this
 summer for the
first
 time. Frankly speaking, I think you should go ahead with your plan as you would have
huge
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 opportunity to come close to the grace of Mother Nature and will have a memorable
holiday
.
Although
 I couldn’t make any camping
holiday
 till now, I have gathered fair idea about
such
 holidaying from few of my friends who have experienced
such
 holidays. I have heard their stories and believe that it’s worth spending time and money provided the plan and preparation for the trip
is
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 perfectly done.
This
 is because it has challenges as well as it’s adventurous. It’s different from a protected
holiday
 where everything is made to order. In camping
holiday
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 there are
few
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 elements of uncertainty like weather
condition
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conditions
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, habitats that exist, unavailability of basic needs and the different environment. All these are important factors in your journey and will be a great learning experience.
Moreover
, the camping
holiday
 would provide ample opportunity to meet nature’s own beauty so closely and
definitely
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 it would be
highly
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 refreshing one. Most importantly you will be out of your comfort zone and your physical endurance test will
also
 be automatically done if you go
for
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rock climbing or if you swim across the canals. I think the duration of the
holiday
 should be flexible
one
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to have a fulfilling sojourn.
Lastly
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 I would like to give you a surprise. I just want to join you in your forthcoming camping
holiday
 and
requesting
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 you to revert with your detailed itinerary so that we both can have a dream
holiday
this
 summer. I look forward to hearing from you soon. All the best. Nav
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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