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Many young people today know more about international pop or movie stars than about famous people in the history of their own country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people’s interest in famous people in the history of their country?

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Nowadays, a young generation of
people
 has much wider knowledge about global pop or movie celebrities than about well-known persons from the
history
 of their own nation. There are several facts why
this
 is an ongoing issue, and there are some solutions that could boost the popularity of national famous
people
. The most important fact that contributes to
such
 attitude is common access to the internet where global news shares a lot of information about international superstars.
This
 is mostly caused by the fact that
people
 who gained a lot of popularity
also
 could generate more profits for TV stations or newspapers.
For example
, the article about Jennifer Lopez, the famous pop singer, can be viewed and read by thousands of
people
 worldwide because everyone knows her, while a singer who is popular only in his own
country
 will not be recognized by
people
 from other nations. There are some solutions to
such
 issues, but everything must be planned upfront. The
first
 idea comes with changes in
history
 classes at the schools. During the time in class, the period should be split into topics related to world
history
 ,and separately to the
history
 of the
country
.
This
 will bring more attention to famous
people
 of the particular
country
. The other solution would be related to the production of movies, songs or video games that involve important
people
 from the past. These media are often watched, listened or played by the young generation, and will redirect their focus on important
people
 from their own
country
. To conclude, changing someone’s interests is not an easy task, but with good planning and ,organization it may be worth it. Young
people
 should be able to recognize the achievements of their own historic
people
 rather than admire international pop or movie stars.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pervasive
  • Globalized media
  • Social media platforms
  • Contemporary culture
  • Glamorous
  • Educational curriculum
  • Multimedia resources
  • National pride
  • Exhibitions
  • Engaging storytelling
  • Interactive apps
  • Historical figures
  • Narratives
  • Celebrations
  • Underemphasizing
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