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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. write a letter to your new employer

#job #week #employer
Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Wail Alqafeai, I am mailing
letter
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a letter
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 to request
for
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apply
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a change in my
join
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joining
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 date. With reference to my appointment for the post of sales manager assistant. As you know, I currently work for my uncle's food packing business, and you will remember from my interview that I have gained valuable experience there. Unfortunately, he has had to go into hospital for a surgical operation, leaving my aunt in charge of both the Home and business.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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