Many museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not local people. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to attract local visitors to these sites?

The pie chart illustrates, percentage of Anthropology degree holders that work
in particular
areas after 5
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. In the table, it gives us the information about the salary scale of same graduates after 5
years
. (Freelance consultant, Government and Private Sector) Overall, the majority of university pass-out student’s work in a full-time job and a small proportion follow postgraduate studies with or without part-time jobs while the similar group doesn’t have records. In terms of salary scales of majority employed earn over $100 thousand on freelancing and government jobs while private companies larger percentage earn bit lower salaries. After 5
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full-time postgraduates and similar
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are unknown. 40% of Freelancers and 50% of government employees
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more than $100,000 of income after 5
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while 35% of private workers earn around $50,000-74,999 as their salaries.
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