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Some families think the best way to take care of their aging parents is to care for them at home. Others believe that it is better for their parents to live in a special home for the elderly. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that sending their
parents
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 to nursing homes is a better option, while some argued that no one else can look after their
parents
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 as best as they do.
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 the special homes for seniors allow them to make more friends, I believe that it is better to take
care
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 of them at home, so that they can enjoy every moment of their remaining
days
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 together with their beloved family. On the one hand, elderly
care
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 facilities allow the residents to socialise. Usually, when the family members have to leave the house in the morning for work or school, their
parents
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 are left at home for the entire day which could make them feel lonely and left out.
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, at the
care
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 facilities, they get to mingle around with others at their age and spend their
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 together through games and activities. My
next
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-door neighbour recently moved to a nursing
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 facility and she shared that she has joined a knitters' group where the group members would gather together and work on their projects over small chats.
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, some families think that it is better for their ageing
parents
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 to stay together with them so that the
parents
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 can spend more time with the family members. Nothing else is more precious than making memories with their grandchildren in their remaining
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. My late grandfather refused to go to hospice
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 and spent his
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days
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 with our family. It was
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 a lovely memory that I will never forget. To conclude, despite the claim that seniors should spend their
days
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 at the nursing home facilities as they would feel less lonely, I think that we should have them with us until their
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days
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 to take better
care
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 of them.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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