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Many people believe that it's better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #group
A number of
people
 believe that learning a new skill on their own helps them find their own pace and progress, while others argue that
group
classes
 are a better option to do so. I am in full agreement with the latter because it is more fun, as well as budget-friendly to join the
group
classes
, and still achieve the goal of learning something. Acquiring a new skill in the learning
classes
 is very much enjoyable which encourages
people
 to feel motivated to continue pursuing. In
group
classes
, we will be learning with other
people
 who have the same interest;
this
 allows us to gain knowledge not only from the tutor alone but
also
 from the
class
 members. I am an example of
this
 myself. I attended a Japanese language
class
 in a classroom of about fifteen
people
. The interactive
group
 activities gave me opportunities to practise my speaking skill and learn from each other's mistakes. Team learning is a great option for
people
 who want to enhance their skills and have a budget constraint. One-to-one teaching usually costs much higher due to the flexibility in scheduling and
also
 in learning progress. For those who are unaffordable to pay more in return for flexibility,
group
 courses make a better choice.
For instance
, my friend wanted to have a crash course on a programming language recently but the individual
class
 would cost her almost triple the amount that
group
class
 offered. As she was low on her savings, she decided to join the
group
 course
instead
. In conclusion, I believe that attending mass
classes
 are a better option, for it not only motivates us throughout our learning journey but the tuition fee is
also
 wallet-friendly.
Submitted by Wai on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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