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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

#people #children #time #families #arguments #side #support
The
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 line graph illustrates household electrical equipment
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 percentage in a specific country between 1920 and 2019.
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 graph gives us
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information about human hours that spend
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above
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the above
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 specific gadgets during the same period. (Washing machine, fridge, vacuum cleaner) Overall,
Usage
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 of the fridge and vacuum cleaner has risen to the maximum level and
washing
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 machine
also
 shows moderate gain while it
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 constant at the end. Working hours per week has
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decline
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 gradually and it
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 approximately constant
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last
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 59 years. In terms of the refrigerator, it has started zero percentage in 1920 and it reached
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 in 1980 while it
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 constant 1980 to 2019. In
this
 period Vacuum cleaner has started 30% in 1920 and gain maximum
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 in 2000 while it plateau in 2000-2019. Weekly
usage
 consumption of the above appliance has decreased gradually from 50% to 20% in
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 1920 to 1960 and it
keep
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 proportionately stable in
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 59 years while it reached to lower level of 10%.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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