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***In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.***

#***in #countries #people #salaries #country #governments #level
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of students who were studying in England who could speak another style with regard to English for ten years. Overall, it can be seen that among of six categories,
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 of them namely No other language and French had a decrease in number,
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 Spanish, another language, and
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 other sounds experienced a slight increase. In 2000, No other language had the
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 rank between other lessons with 20 %;
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, it was halved in the period between 2000 and 2014.
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, the student who was interested in French and German accounted for 15% and 10% respectively. The percentage of French learners was one in 2010;
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, the per cent of German accents had not experienced change during a decade. In spike contrast, Spanish was the most popular speech made up 65 per cent in the UK collectively. On the other side, another lingo was chosen by 15 % of graduate people and
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 other lingos were selected by one in ten Britain pupils. While another and
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 other expressions both of which had a slight increase with a fifth and 15 % of spoken people.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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