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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, with the advent of advanced telecommunication and photographic technologies, visual expression in mediums
such
 as television, photography and films are increasingly becoming popular as powerful means of expression when compared to the simple mundane printed medium. The increasing preference and use of visual resources over written
communication
 is an undeniable fact and the growing utilisation of
video based
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 learning in modern schools over
text book
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 based knowledge transfer is the best possible example. In the present evidence-seeking world, visual
communication
 is a powerful tool as it provides recognisable facts. Meticulously crafted images, like political cartoons and television
documentaries
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 readily deliver the concerned messages to the onlookers and are
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 beneficial in conveying thoughts to the busy and uneducated sections of the society. The television is
also
 being bombarded with numerous catchy advertisements, by which manufacturers try to communicate with the masses regarding their products.
On the other hand
, the appeal of the printed media as means of mass
communication
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 is declining as the younger generation considers it to be relatively old fashioned and boring.
Moreover
, in the
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 modern city life,
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number of
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people can afford to dedicate time
for
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 reading the daily morning newsprints,
instead
, most of the city dwellers follow
daily-televised
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 news. Despite
this
 decreased appeal for mass
communication
,
value
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 of the written form still stands tall in the field of interpersonal and formal
communication
. Written words, as a form of
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 documentation, can never be superseded by any other means.
Thus
, visual
communication
 is definitely a popular, powerful and better tool for mass
communication
 but written form of expression still has equal importance for official, formal and interpersonal purposes.
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