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Band 4

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In spite of the advancement of
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technology and innovation these days, still, there are
countries
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 having poverty problems. Most
afflulent
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affluent
 nations offer
developing
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 and underdeveloped
countries
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 support in
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 of finance but
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 method cannot resolve the issue.
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, poor nations
shold
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should
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others
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 kinds of support rather than
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. Personally, I completely agree with
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 of all, there would be
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dishonesty using the donated cash. it is undeniable that almost every country has
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perfidy, so there is a tendency that there is
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corruption within the national administration. These voracious and selfish leaders, without caring
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 citizens' lives, will spend the received
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 for personal profits
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 of investing
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 various organizations which can alleviate the beggary.
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, I
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believe that
 one of the imperative factors which should give to poor nations to eliminate poverty is education. Having numerous
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 will be good for nothing if the government of that nation cannot manipulate the
money
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 which obtains from the developed
countries
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 in a suitable way to improve the citizens' financial status. So, developed
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 should invest in better education and school in order to
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well cultivated
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 people.
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, domestic folk will have professions and earn some income. To summarize, I conceive that offering financial aid to deficient-
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countries
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 is not an appropriate solution to make them
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 from poverty.
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,
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 of granting financial aid, wealthy
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 should provide other supports
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 as knowledge, health care, or food.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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