Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In spite of the advancement of

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technology and innovation these days, still, there are

countries

having poverty problems. Most

afflulent

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affluent

nations offer

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and underdeveloped

countries

support in

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of finance but

this

method cannot resolve the issue.

Thus

, poor nations

shold

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should

be received

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kinds of support rather than

money

. Personally, I completely agree with

this

statement and I will expand my ideas in the essay below.

First

of all, there would be

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dishonesty using the donated cash. it is undeniable that almost every country has

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perfidy, so there is a tendency that there is

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corruption within the national administration. These voracious and selfish leaders, without caring

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citizens' lives, will spend the received

money

for personal profits

instead

of investing

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various organizations which can alleviate the beggary.

Secondly

, I

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believe that

one of the imperative factors which should give to poor nations to eliminate poverty is education. Having numerous

money

will be good for nothing if the government of that nation cannot manipulate the

money

which obtains from the developed

countries

in a suitable way to improve the citizens' financial status. So, developed

countries

should invest in better education and school in order to

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people.

As a result

, domestic folk will have professions and earn some income. To summarize, I conceive that offering financial aid to deficient-

money

countries

is not an appropriate solution to make them

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from poverty.

Therefore

,

instead

of granting financial aid, wealthy

countries

should provide other supports

such

as knowledge, health care, or food.