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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
Education
 is a foundation to achieve the goals in life. Some people believe that proper learning can be taught when you study in a university. How tuition fees can be affecting the interests of an individual to learn? In
this
 essay, I will discuss how I disagree that students should be shouldering all the expenses to go to universities.
To begin
 with, some people are interested to go to a higher level of
education
, because they believe it will be beneficial to them for finding a job in the future.
However
, tuition fees at these schools are expensive, sometimes it depends on what course are they going to take.
That is
 why, many of them are doing part-time jobs to support their financial expenses, aside from rent, food and transportation they
also
needalso
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need also
 need to budget their requirements in their courses.
In addition
, projects, exams, on-the-job training are
also
 included for them to save.
Furthermore
, some countries think that youths are important in
the
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society,
therefore
, some places are providing free
education
 to their people. Others are offering scholarships to the learners who are having remarkable grades. Another option is some colleges are having two-year course programs, that help them to finish vocational and have a degree. In conclusion, we need to support them to reach
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what they become and teach them that
education
 is very important to be successful.
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