Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Learning is a must for each of us, learning will give us a lot of
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to make us more mature, it
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gives us a lot of
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necessary for our lives
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life
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, communication
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Since ancient times, people have known the importance of accumulating
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and have sought to be able to pass on
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to the
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generations, and from there the
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was born.
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is a place that will teach younger generations all the
knowledge
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they need to have for their future lives, but in the current 4.0 era,
school
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seems to be no longer so important when every student Everyone can look up whatever
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they need on the
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. Self-studying and looking up
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on the
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is very convenient in
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modernized age, anything you don't know, you can look it up on the
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quickly, and it's
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very convenient. There are many sources for you to research and choose the source of
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that is
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right for you. But
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the harm of self-studying, the younger generations still do not have enough experience to be able to filter out the unhealthy
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on the
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. They will be very easily influenced by
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content
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and believe that the
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is real, more seriously, they may be tricked by
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content
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into doing illegal activities
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Other than that harm, self-study on the
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will not make you acquire the necessary
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skills
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. Just sitting at home, using a computer or phone to study and look up
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won't make
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communication
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, it will make them socially alienated when they can't communicate with everyone In short, the
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does not need to teach the young generation basic
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, because that now has the
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, it will teach them the necessary
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skills
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to be successful in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social development
  • fostering communication
  • personalized guidance
  • immediate feedback
  • replicated
  • structured environments
  • discipline
  • time management skills
  • extracurricular activities
  • nurture talents
  • inculcate
  • sense of community
  • shared learning experiences
  • equal access
  • learning opportunities
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