Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that
students
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to choose what they
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want
to
study
. While
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that they should
study
only the
relevance
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subjects
that are useful in the future working life
such
as if they will be working in science or
tecnology
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technology
then
they have to
study
the
subjects
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, to work in science or technology fields. In
this
essay I will be
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discuss
about both views
then
, I will give my option in the end. On the one hand, it is common that
students
who
study
the
subjects
they have passion for, usual do greatly at the university. The
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benefit
benefits
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is that
students
have
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higher
motivation which
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them
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good in
study
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, researchers
also
found out that
students
who choose the
subjects
they like
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are doing much better than those who have to accomplish all obligations
subjects
Nevertheless
,
this
is not how it is in the real life.
On the other hand
, there are some people that believe whether studying of student´s choice
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waste of time. It is
also
not worth
to
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study
the
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subjects
subject
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not
relevance
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for
the
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future working life.
However
, the obligation
subjects
could be its drawback, due to it is outside of student´s interest. In conclusion, while someone
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that
students
who
study
of their interests
,
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are not the worth for our future.
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I think it could be
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of both. There should be a
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few
selecting subject that let
students
have
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instance, one of their choice, and three
subjects
could be obligations, that they still will get
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for the science or
tehnology
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technology
field. .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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