Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Some individuals believe that some physically intense or combat
sport
should be banned. In my opinion, Fix the agreement mistake
sports
this
idea is absurd in some ways because the benefits that these kinds of pastimes provide is
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apply
outweighing
their drawbacks. In Wrong verb form
outweigh
this
essay, I will give my point of view about its physical and commercial advantages. In the first place,it cannot be denied that some dangerous athletic activities such
as boxing, football or Formula 1 racing could lead to serious injuries if individuals did
not protect themselves well enough or when some technical problem occurs.Wrong verb form
do
This
is completely true owing to the fact that many competitors end up having serious physical problems during or as after-effects as a result
of these competitions. However
, these make a large amount of money. For instance
, when big events such
as the Super Bowl Finale or boxing
match of the world-class boxer Mayweather came, these would definitely attract substantial attention Correct article usage
the boxing
of
the world. Change preposition
from
Therefore
, millions of dollars could be made based on these events through advertisement
or Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
souvenirs
sales and I think that getting rid of the money by banning these sports is unreasonable and could be detrimental to the economy. Change the noun form
souvenir
Furthermore
, I believe that all physical sports contain a risk of getting injured when people do the technique wrongly, but the benefit
they bring are strength, flexibility and emotional moments. Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
For example
, football is played by the public around the world despite the fact that it could cause injuries, what is more, some does
get injured but Correct subject-verb agreement
do
then
,still continue to rejoin the sport because of the benefits it brings. Hence
, banning dangerous sport
is unnecessary and could make people become couch potatoes. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea of banning dangerous games because of the obvious health benefits for the people and Fix the agreement mistake
sports
financial
aid that would bring to humans. These sports are recreational, exercising and Correct article usage
the financial
furthermore
money-making tools for humans.Submitted by josephjjj333 on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion