Write about the following topic: Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the midst of
this
technology-driven global world,each and everyone
have
their own personal vlogs Change the verb form
has
in
social Change preposition
on
media
platform.Hence
,everyone
used to follow the celebrities
and intrupt
their privacy by clicking their photographs and publishing Correct your spelling
interrupt
it
.Some believe that Correct pronoun usage
them
these
all makes them fame more.Correct pronoun usage
this
However
,in my opinion,people
should not do so. Everyone
have
their own personal time and place. After Change the verb form
has
all
Add a comma
,all
celebrities
are also
human
Add an article
a human
being
.
On the one hand, some Fix the agreement mistake
beings
people
assuming
thatWrong verb form
assume
,
Remove the comma
apply
famous
person must Add an article
a famous
the famous
sacrifies
their privacy for their fame. Correct your spelling
sacrifice
sacrifices
People
like to follow them and take their photographs and videos and ask lots of questions to
them and publish them Change preposition
apply
in
social Change preposition
on
media
platform
.Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
Hence
,they will be always in media
so Correct article usage
the media
peple
will get more Correct your spelling
people
familior
with them,Correct your spelling
familiar
then
only they will be more famous.Ostensibly,those from the film industry must be in Add an article
the lime
lime light
,so Correct your spelling
limelight
this
will be beneficial for them.Otherwise
,they might loss
some chances to act in films, as well as Replace the word
lose
people
think that they are out of field
,Add an article
the field
this
is also
a fact.However
,media
people
should not follow them where-ever
they go and whatever they do.
Correct your spelling
wherever
On the other hand
, celebrities
are
Change the verb form
also have
also
have feelings,emotions and right
to enjoy their Correct article usage
the right
life
as they wish. If someone follow
them they won't be feeling comfortable. Nowadays, Change the verb form
follows
media
is not even leaving the celebrities
( from film industry) family,especially their kids are also
under camera all the time. For example
, last
year i
saw a video,where there was a Change the capitalization
I
three year old
kid with a famous actress Add a hyphen
three-year-old
was
just arriving to attend a family function,there they Correct pronoun usage
who was
caught
by Add a missing verb
were caught
Correct your spelling
paparazzi
paparazzis
,they started clicking the pictures of them and the baby girl got scared and started crying like anything still they Correct your spelling
paparazzi
didnt
stop following them.Correct your spelling
didn't
This
is not the right way to make celebrities
more famous.Actually
they are giving trouble to them. they can't enjoy their Add a comma
,Actually
life
like all others.Admittedly,they are having high
profile and Correct article usage
a high
high quality
Add a hyphen
high-quality
life
but that is
not enough to be happy. Moreover
they should need their own personal or private Add a comma
,Moreover
life
. Obviously,we all should respect each and everyone
's personal life
.
To conclude,the famous people
are not a
public property, to follow them and capture their pictures without their Remove the article
apply
permision
,as well as give false news about them.Apparently,they reached Correct your spelling
permission
this
position by
their Change preposition
through
hardwork
,so we should respect that and give them their personal space and in between with their Correct your spelling
hard work
Correct your spelling
permission
permision
anyone can follow them and share pictures with them.Add a comma
,permision
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