Write about the following topic: Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the midst of

this

technology-driven global world,each and

everyone

have

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their own personal vlogs

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social

media

platform.

Hence

everyone

used to follow the

celebrities

and

intrupt

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interrupt

their privacy by clicking their photographs and publishing

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them

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.Some believe that

these

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this

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all makes them fame more.

However

,in my opinion,

people

should not do so.

Everyone

have

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their own personal time and place. After

all

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celebrities

are

also

human

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a human

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being

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beings

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. On the one hand, some

people

assuming

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that

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apply

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famous

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a famous

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person must

sacrifies

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sacrifice

sacrifices

their privacy for their fame.

People

like to follow them and take their photographs and videos and ask lots of questions

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apply

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them and publish them

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social

media

platform

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platforms

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Hence

,they will be always in

media

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the media

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peple

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people

will get more

familior

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familiar

with them,

then

only they will be more famous.Ostensibly,those from the film industry must be in

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the lime

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lime light

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limelight

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,so

this

will be beneficial for them.

Otherwise

,they might

loss

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some chances to act in films, as well as

people

think that they are out of

field

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the field

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this

also

a fact.

However

media

people

should not follow them

where-ever

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wherever

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they go and whatever they do.

On the other hand

celebrities

are

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also have

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also

have feelings,emotions and

right

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the right

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to enjoy their

life

as they wish. If someone

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follows

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them they won't be feeling comfortable. Nowadays,

media

is not even leaving the

celebrities

( from film industry) family,especially their kids are

also

under camera all the time.

For example

last

year

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saw a video,where there was a

three year old

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three-year-old

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kid with a famous actress

was

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who was

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just arriving to attend a family function,there they

caught

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were caught

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paparazzi

paparazzis

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paparazzi

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,they started clicking the pictures of them and the baby girl got scared and started crying like anything still they

didnt

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didn't

stop following them.

This

is not the right way to make

celebrities

more famous.

Actually

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they are giving trouble to them. they can't enjoy their

life

like all others.Admittedly,they are having

high

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a high

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profile and

high quality

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life

but

that is

not enough to be happy.

Moreover

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they should need their own personal or private

life

. Obviously,we all should respect each and

everyone

's personal

life

. To conclude,the famous

people

are not

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public property, to follow them and capture their pictures without their

permision

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permission

,as well as give false news about them.Apparently,they reached

this

position

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through

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their

hardwork

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hard work

,so we should respect that and give them their personal space and in between with their

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permission

permision

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,permision

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anyone can follow them and share pictures with them.

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Topic Vocabulary:

privacy invasion
public figure
mental health impact
media scrutiny
right to privacy
public interest
celebrity culture
press freedom
stress-related illnesses
publicity tool

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