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Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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The pie chart illustrates
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a comparison
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 of average household expenditure between
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 2010. The main sectors for consideration
consists
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 of 5 categories including housing, transport, food, health care, other goods and services. Overall, the other goods and services
was
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 the largest
expense
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 in
Japan
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 while in
Malaysia
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, the highest numbers belong to housing
catagory
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category
 with 29% and 34% respectively. It is interesting to see that
health
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the health
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 care sector was the least
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expense
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expensive
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 for both countries.
Japan
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 spent in total 29% ,which consecutively 10% more than
Malaysia
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 with 26%. Meanwhile,
Malaysia
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's expenditure slightly surpassed
Japan
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expense
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 in
Food
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the Food
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 sector
for
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by
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 3% with
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 estimated
expense
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 of 27%.
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