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Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts
illustrates
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 a comparison
on
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of
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 household expenditure between
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in the year 2010. The concerned sectors
including
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 Housing, Transport, Food, Health care as well as Other goods and services. Overall, the highest participation rate belonged to Other goods and services in
Japan
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 with 29% in 2010. Meanwhile, the majority expense in
Malaysia
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 was Housing in
total
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a total
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 of 34% in the same year. The lowest expenditure for both
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 was in
Health
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the Health
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 care region, 6% and 3% respectively. Moving forward with the rest of
description
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, the
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second highest
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second-highest
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 spent in
Japan
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 was in
Housing
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the Housing
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 category for 21%.
On the other hand
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,
Food
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the Food
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 sector was the secondary for
Malaysia
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 with 27%.
Moreover
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, In
food
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the food
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 category, 24% was spent in total in
Japan
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 which
considered
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to be
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 3% less than
Malaysia
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. Consecutively,
Japan
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 spent 10% more than
Malaysia
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 in Transport aspect with
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 of 20% and 10% respectively.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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