Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

College
students
are regarded as the world's future because they are well-educated and creative, so they always get much
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attention
. Some people consider that
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students
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are supposed to
study
what they really like. But in others' opinion, subjects which are useful in the future like science should be the main
study
purpose of
students
.
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students
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whatever they like is a good way to improve the development in all
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of society. Different person has different interests, they
also
prefer gaining different kinds of knowledge, that's why we have many majors in
college
. Only if we learn what we like, we could have the passion and will to insist
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studying and practising
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have learnt. For a long time, maybe we could be the specialist in
this
area.
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, many scientists have a deep love
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what they investigate, they never give up during the long experiment time because of
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fancy,
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they
achive
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achieve
achieved
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success
. Supposed that every aspect
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specialists who would like to discover or invent something new, all aspects in our society will be developed in general. If
college
students
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alowed
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allowed
to
study
subjects
which
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related
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to science and
technology
, a positive effect on people's
life
is obvious. Compared with the past decades,
life
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these days is much more convenient.
For instance
, due to the invention of
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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and
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, we can contact
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friends who are far away from us anywhere and anytime, it is impossible in ancient
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times
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.
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like
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is
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numerous, but all in all, without
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high
technology
, we could not have the chance to enjoy the
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convenience
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modern
life
. In my opinion, I prefer to support the viewpoint that
students
should
study
what they like.
Although
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technology
could improve
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life
quality,
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life
can't be really better if only
technology
advances. The component of society is numerous, it can't only have science and
technology
, but other aspects like art , politics and economy, without these factors, our
life
will be very dull, the quality of
life
will never be truly improved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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