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The percentage of 3 types of crimes: car theft, house burglary & street robbery in England & Wales from 1970 to 2015

The graph illustrates how three types of
crimes
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 namely
car
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theft
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,
house
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burglary
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 and
street
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robbery
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 were committed in England and Wales during 1970-2000. Overall, there was an increase in the proportion of
crimes
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car
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theft
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 and
house
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burglary
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 especially in the former
period
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, while a slight fluctuation was seen in the
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 for
Street
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Robbery
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. It is
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 clear that the share of
crimes
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 in
car
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theft
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 in the UK and Wales is by far the highest
figures
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 throughout the
period
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. The percentage of the
offense
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 in
car
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theft
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 started at 0,4% in 1970, after which it saw a dramatic rise to 1,4% fifteen years later. Similar changes, but lesser extents were seen in the
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 for
house
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burglary
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, which increased from 0,3% to about 0,5% in 1985.
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, 0,1%
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crimes
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 in
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street
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the street
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robbery
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 were committed in 1970, with a slight increase to nearly 0,2% in the
first
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 fifteen years. From 1985 to 2000, the number of
car
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 thefts dropped significantly, reaching 0,8% in 2000. The
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 for
house
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burglary
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 continued to increase to 0,6% in 1990, before ending the
period
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 at 0,4%. Meanwhile, the
street
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robbery
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 fluctuated between 0,1% to about 0,18% and maintained at roughly 0,1% at the end of the
period
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.

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