It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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, Every human is relying too much on

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. And due to

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overreliance, it is unavoidable to say that traditional culture is coming to an end as

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is developing dramatically with each passing day. I completely agree with

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statement and will give reasons regarding it in

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essay. With the advent of

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, Human

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have

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become very flexible, easy and safe. We can see now every person has

mobile

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phone in his hand and it is just one

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and let us see

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one

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bought

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in individual

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and made their

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flexible.

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a person

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person

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can go to any part of the world and still can contact

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their parents through mobile phone. While living away from them, He can share his sorrow as well as happiness with his

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ones.In traditional cultures, there was no facility that a person can contact

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their loved one when in need. So

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is why

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are losing the traditional culture as

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is giving them

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ease. The other reason is that

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nowadays desire to live a prosperous

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. They want to earn

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of money and

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have made it very easy for them.

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has generated

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of employment for

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so that they can earn money and live

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their

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.Whereas, before

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job

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were not there and

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source of income was farming only. But now we can see jobs in lots of

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. So, Job

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increased and it

give

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equal opportunities for every youth so that they can dwell their

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. To conclude, I would say that there is no

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competition

between

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and traditional cultures as

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has helped

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with ease and

flexiblity

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flexibility

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as well as it

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generated lots of employment in

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of fields and these are the reasons

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are going towards

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and ending traditional culture.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

inevitable
traditional cultures
technological development
modern society
incompatible
decline
traditional crafts
rituals
digital communication
preserve
promote
documentation
online archives
virtual museums
social media
coexist
integrates
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augmented reality
cultural tourism
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