It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Nowdays
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, Every human is relying too much on
Technology
. And due to
this
overreliance, it is unavoidable to say that traditional culture is coming to an end as
technology
is developing dramatically with each passing day. I completely agree with
this
statement and will give reasons regarding it in
this
essay. With the advent of
technology
, Human
life
have
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become very flexible, easy and safe. We can see now every person has
mobile
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phone in his hand and it is just one
technology
and let us see
this
one
technology
have
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bought
change
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in individual
life
and made their
life
flexible.
For example
, now
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a person
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person
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people
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can go to any part of the world and still can contact
to
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their parents through mobile phone. While living away from them, He can share his sorrow as well as happiness with his
closed
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ones.In traditional cultures, there was no facility that a person can contact
to
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their loved one when in need. So
this
is why
people
are losing the traditional culture as
technology
is giving them
an
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ease. The other reason is that
human
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humans
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nowadays desire to live a prosperous
life
. They want to earn
lot
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of money and
technology
have made it very easy for them.
Technology
has generated
bulk
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of employment for
people
so that they can earn money and live
thier
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their
life
.Whereas, before
technology
job
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jobs
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were not there and
main
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source of income was farming only. But now we can see jobs in lots of
field
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. So, Job
have
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increased and it
give
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equal opportunities for every youth so that they can dwell their
life
. To conclude, I would say that there is no
competiton
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competition
between
technology
and traditional cultures as
technology
has helped
people
with ease and
flexiblity
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flexibility
of
life
as well as it
have
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generated lots of employment in
variety
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of fields and these are the reasons
people
are going towards
technology
and ending traditional culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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