Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

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industry has grown over the years. Half of the time,

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is showing celebrities'

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life style

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and what are they

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is interesting. Though, I believe that it has a bad impact on children because the

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only covers either their luxurious lifestyle or their bad habits. Due to the fact that modern technologies and social

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platforms, one can easily get

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information about anyone.

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mostly covers celebrities and politics.

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less concerned about

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political

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channels generally broadcast film stars and models. Be it on social platforms or

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, it is about their high standard living style or how they dressed up

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or where did they go for a vacation, etc.

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goes beyond and show the dark side of them.

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caught using drugs. Being a star, people want to know about

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everything. But sometimes,

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overlooked that they have young viewers

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. The way

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them, half of the young generation consider them as their idol. Children do not understand that

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necessary to look good to get the work. Kids look up to

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stars and follow them blindly. They want to look exactly like them and copy their attire as well. Parents sometimes are concerned about their kids as they want expensive

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them and want to live

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. According to one survey, young girls get depressed if

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watch or read about celebrity's fashion more than twice. it is obvious that

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feeling inferiority comparing

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with them. In conclusion,

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should have restricted content when they publish about

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as it has

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negative impact on young kids than a

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positive

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
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Finally
In a nutshell
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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
32Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Celebrity culture
Glamorization
Unrealistic expectations
Self-esteem
Scandals
Role models
Moral development
Mental health
Influence
Exposure
Social media platforms
Charity work
Inappropriate behavior
Perfection image
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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Task 2: Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages?

Your friend has a baby recently and you bought a present for baby. Write a letter and - Describe what you bought? - Why you choose that present? - Suggest some arrangements to visit your friend to bring the present.