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It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#internet #communication #people #place #information
Currently, there are some disputes about the advantages of using
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. It is commonly considered that
Internet
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 is
necessary
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a necessary
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 and useful way of communication while some speculate that we can not rely on
Internet
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 in
term
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 of getting
information
. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss both views and explain why
Internet
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 is a necessary part of our life in all
sphere
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 and why we should be concerned about
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the other
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other
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 side of
Internet
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. On the one hand, the
Internet
 modified our way of communication. Due to various online applications and social
media
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 our life became much easier. Compared to past times, we have
opportunity
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 to send a message or call other
people
 who are in different locations.
For example
, numerous students move from their parents
in
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to
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 other cities in order to get high education. The possibility to contact
with
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their parents via online video chat alleviate
lives
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both
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of both
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 students and parents.
Moreover
, we have an amazing chance to make
friendship
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 with
people
 from different countries. It not only brings
people
 from different nations together but
also
reinforce
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 international communication.
For example
, the growth in
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 of
marriage
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marriages
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 between Russian and
Korean
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Korea
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 in
last
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the last
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 decade
leaded
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 to cooperation between these two countries.
On the other hand
, some
information
 on the
Internet
 might be incorrect.
Internet
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provide
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provides
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 us with all kinds of
information
 which
was
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were
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 made by humans. Most of the
database
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databases
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delivered
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are delivered
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 by professional
researches
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researchers
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 whose investigations can be proofed.
However
, some facts can be incorrect and lead to
confusions
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. Some
people
 who are not experts
in
particular
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 sphere just provide society with irrelevant
information
.
For example
, some journalists write
in
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 their sites different
rumors
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rumours
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 about celebrities which in fact are not real.
Hence
, we should not trust all data that are on
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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