In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs, what are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

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Now a days
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in modern societies the parental
role
and responsibility varies and the main causes are the busy schedule of the
parents
. In
this
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we will intend to describe the main
role
of
parents
which is obligatory to raise the
children
in a well-mannered and cultured
way
. There are lots of
difference
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when it comes to
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the
role
of a mother and father. It is rightly said the mother lap is the
first
school for a child. There are lots of responsibilities which mothers only can play to raise the
kids
especially up to the age of five years.
This
will lead to a situation where the mother only has to take care of their
children
and which might put her
in
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a lot of stress.
However
, the fathers should not take
this
as an advantage and must help their better
half’s
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in every possible
way
to raise the
kids
in a decent, cultured and mannered
way
. In some cases, it is seen that the father is too busy with his work schedule and
hence
cannot give much time to their
kids
. The father
think
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that money is enough to raise the
kids
while in many social experiments, it is observed that the
parents
who are unable to give enough time to their
children
and
instead
provide them with lots of expensive toys and those
children
are still depressed and not doing socially well. The
parents
should play an important
role
in raising the
children
and should not alone depend on nanny or school. The school can provide the education but the care and love which every child deserve shall be given by the
parents
.
Hence
, it is at
most
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obligation of both the
parents
that the needed time should be given to their
children
.
In addition
to
this
, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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of the
parents
to teach their
kids
for
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social and ethical
behavior
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apart from academic teachings. To summarize,
the
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money can buy
the
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materialistic things but not the love which every child deserves. So, I reiterate that every parent should take
this
responsibility in raising the in a well and cultured
way
.
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