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You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Explain where the money comes from. say what you intend to do with the money. Invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune

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Dear Alina, It is a great pleasure to write
you
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 with a piece of exciting news, I received yesterday. You’ll be over the moon to know that,
last
 Friday I received a huge amount of
money
 from my cousin by fortune. Two years back I invested on his farm which was running into debt
that
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 time. I had forgotten about the
money
, due to the continuous loss of his business till I kept updated. Now he returned that
money
 back with interest, which is near about 10,000 dollars in exchange for 1000 dollars. I am overwhelmed with joy till I received the
money
. I made a plan
also
, where to
use
 the currency. As you know, I was trying to collect
money
 for my charity work for educating children. I decided to
use
 half
money
 for the project which will give a boost to the
programe
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programme
program
. Another half of the
money
 I’ll
use
 on buying a car, which I wanted to buy for a long. I wish you to be here, so together we may utilize the
money
 where I intended to
use
. If you come, It would be a great help for me, as I need a volunteer for my education work. I get confused on the matter of machines
also
, and you have great knowledge
on
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 it, which will be helpful while buying a car. I’ll be waiting for you and looking forward to seeing you soon. With love Asma
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