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Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #activities
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relaxation
exercise
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exercises
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are roots
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 to
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the wellbeing
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wellbeing
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well-being
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 of humans. Certain communities would like to engage with physical
exercise
 to
be relax
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relax
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, while opponents assist with
mind
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mental
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activities
.
Although
 both parties prefered one side, I believe that both physical and mental
exercises
 will benefit society with healthy and relaxed lives. Nowadays, most
of
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people
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the people
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 would prefer physical
exercises
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exercise
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 to relaxed, because those
activities
 aid them to get-away from their routing lifestyles and enrich them with better health conditions. Having a morning jogging in
countryside
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the countryside
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 or
at
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 a walking path will nourish
people
 with fresh air, and
this
 makes their day calm and energetic.
In addition
,
this
 will reduce
their
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 calories and unwanted fat, deposited in body muscles.
As a result
,
people
 can easily get rid of long time
illness
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illnesses
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 like cholesterol and blood pressure.
On the other hand
, some
communites
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communities
 are like to engage with
activities
, which are focused on
mind
, to relaxed.
This
 is to say,
considerable
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a considerable
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 number of
people
 are engaged with Yoga
exercises
 to develop their mental
relaxations
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relaxation
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.
Moreover
, several
people
are take
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 part in
meditation
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a meditation
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program
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programs
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, like Bhawana, continuously. Though being calm by focusing
mind
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the mind
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 on one subject, those mental
activities
 assist
people
 to feel relaxed and heal their lives. In my opinion,
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle is the key to
spend
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spending
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 our lives happily without any struggle in
mind
.
Therefore
, to enjoy
a
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apply
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perfect
relaxation
 in
the
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life, all the
people
 must focus on their physical
exercises
 as well as mental
activities
. In conclusion, different
commuinities
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communities
 may
argued
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argue
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 that
relaxation
 is an output of physical
activities
 or mental
activities
.
Nevertheless
, my opinion is both physical
exercise
 and
mind
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mental
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exercise
 are
equaly
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equally
 important to feel the
relaxation
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relaxed
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 vibe in
a
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apply
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life.
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