Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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Violent scenes in the
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and mentally sides of
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by increasing criminals in our life and
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scenes can change your thoughts and feelings for
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of the
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near their heart. The possible overcome of
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is changing rules for accepting a
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without unusable moments.
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number of criminals in our society and it will have a danger for innocent people. In fact, everyone
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about a life which introduces in the
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sides of our life and several unnecessary episodes which can abuse
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in the films.
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is declaiming the projects of authors and it can decrease the level of criminal over the
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film
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moments in movies of modern projects and effecting negatively to audience’s mind.
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can be partly alleviated by adding
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rigorous examination for all works. I will certainly use it if it was introduced in my area.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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