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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Higher education which the universities are providing is their main function to make the students successful.
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 what extent it is applicable and how it will affect the graduates in finding jobs? In
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 essay, I will discuss some main points on how universities contribute
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 the success of their graduates.
To begin
 with, the place where
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an individual
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individual
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 can have a proper education and training
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, it comes on which universities they are going to. Some reasons what learners are considering to find which place to study are, one example is famous
school
, because they believe that they are known to have excellent teachers, which are experienced and popular which educate their students to be successful in their chosen careers.
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 one is having
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,
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 as, libraries, laboratories, computer rooms, training rooms and many more, which they can train and enhance their skills.
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 that it still depends on the students how they will learn, provided that if they have interests
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 what are they are taking no matter in what
school
 they are. Other people
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, it has a big influence if you graduated
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 a known
school
 because it
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 who you are.
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, it can
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school
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 In conclusion, it all depends on how the individual carry themselves when they are applying for
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 because skills and education
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 more important. It is true that the place where you graduated can influence but it is more on how you present yourself when applying and how is your attitude can bring you to be successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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