In some countries, people are spending long hours at the workplace. Why does this happen? Is it a positive or negative development?

In some parts of the world, working overtime has been increasingly prevalent among employees. There are several reasons why
this
trend occurs but unfortunately, I believe that the negative impacts of
this
issue far outweigh the advantages.
First
and foremost,
this
phenomenon is becoming more and more popular in both developed and developing countries, where there are abundant jobs in the job market.
Furthermore
, due to overpopulation, the
labor
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market is becoming more competitive than ever. Take China,
for example
, overpopulation is a serious problem that each citizen needs to make an attempt to
work
harder than anyone else to grab any job opportunities and they are willing to take on some extra
work
to prove their potential to employers or directors to gain promotion and get higher income. The
second
reason for
this
movement is none other than as the world is becoming progress, more
work
needs to be done but they can’t leave
this
task for tomorrow.
As a result
, they choose to stay at the office longer to do
this
task until the job is completed.
Secondly
,
this
tendency definitely has detrimental effects on human beings, especially on their health. As workers have to spend more time on their
work
, they will have less time to take care of themselves. Working for long hours means they do not have time to come home and have a proper meal, refresh for the
next
working day. As a consequence,
this
may lead to a decline in
work
efficiency because they no longer have enough energy to receive a new task, and they feel exhausted with office hours.
For instance
, according to recent surveys, Japanese office workers need to spend more than 10 hours a day on average to finish their jobs and many of them could not stand the pressure of
work
and colleagues, they commit suicide. In conclusion, spending half of their days at
work
is somehow may
benefits
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to win promotion, but from my
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that may cause more harmful impacts on humans
such
as health and
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loosing
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work
-life balance.
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