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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organisation

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These days most of the population is inclining towards self-employment
instead
 of working as an employee in a company or a big institution. There is a number of reasons why
people
 are willing to do
this
 that I will explain in
further
 paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, everyone has developed a mindset that if they work in 9-5 jobs
then
, they will become part of the rat race.
consequently
, lose freedom which eventually, lead them to work or start a
business
 on their own.
Secondly
, it has become a trend among young adults to do something even if it is a small
business
 rather than stuck in big organisations.
In addition
 to that, there are job security means, as we have already seen that in covid time, so many
people
 have lost their job who was working in a big corporation.
However
,the scenario would be different if they were self-employed.
Furthermore
, world connectivity has increased with the advancement of technology and
this
 provides an excellent opportunity to advertise your product,
business
 to a large group of
people
.
Also
, nowadays getting investment for
business
 become somewhat easy than before as investors are looking forward to
this
 kind of opportunity.
Although
, there are multiple advantages of having own
buisness
Correct your spelling
business
 , it
also
 includes risk associated
such
 as, it is not always possible to get success. Along with
this
, more responsibility falls on your shoulder and a huge amount of work is needed in terms to get successful. Overall, in spite of the lack of possibility to get success more and more
people
 are choosing self-employment as
this
 gives you the freedom to do whatever you want and
also
 helps you to put forward your ideas, visions.
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