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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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In recent years, online shopping has become a phenomenon
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 predicted to be a preferred method of buying products in the long run and may replace traditional stores. In my opinion, I partly agree with
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 statement as purchasing items from the Internet may be more ubiquitous in consecutive decades, traditional shops still play a pivotal role in society. I shall put forth some ideas to exemplify my points in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, with the advancement of technology, the shopping experience has become more convenient and flexible to busy customers as they can access the information of various goods through websites of producers.
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, buyers can
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 read feedbacks from previous users about the products that they are keen on and make better decisions. With the development and effective collaboration between producers and delivery corporations, consumers now can purchase international products which will be delivered to their front door within a few working days. The emergence of conglomerates
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 as Amazon or Alibaba has captivated numerous young buyers and become competitors of many local businesses.
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, while going to traditional markets may be time-consuming, many adults or senior citizens may find it interesting as these markets bring an exciting and cosy ambience to these shoppers. In fact, numerous people in Vietnam consider
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 a great occasion to relax, socialise and make new friends as while housewives are busy purchasing and bargaining goods, their husbands are keen on waiting in coffee shops and having a chit-chat with others.
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, the atmosphere of the traditional market is often busy and fantastic on holidays like the Lunar New Year and
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 is something that can not be experienced when purchasing through the Internet.
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 but not least, when visiting physical stores, consumers can actually touch and try items before they decide to buy while shopping online may not provide
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 opportunities. In conclusion, while I tend to believe that online businesses may attract more customers in the future due to the convenience, more shoppers may choose to visit traditional markets on special occasions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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