You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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Dear Aseem, I am writing

this

letter to let you know about the latest vaccination scam in my country. Since you were keen to know why

this

vaccination blunder has

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world's

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the world's

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attention and what is the inside story, here is the story. The government has started

immunity

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an immunity

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dose for the age group of 18 above and every person can avail

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for free with the appointment only.

However

, a few health workers started selling in

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market for 100 rupees without booking any slot for the same. In order to do so, they are injecting people with just water

instead

of a real dose.

Last

Tuesday, when one medical representative has his turn to get the vaccine, he saw that staff

didnt

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didn't

take out vaccine injection from the

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and it was quite surprising as everyone knows that how to store

such

vaccinations in cold temperature. He made a video and viral it on

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social platforms which

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everyone's attention. Due to fact that it is

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of one's health people are concerned about it and asking for the genuinity. I am kinda worried too as I booked the appointment for my whole family

this

week. I am in

dilema

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dilemma

to get it or not? So

this

is the whole story about it. Bye for now. Take care.

Brijal

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Bridal

Brinjal

Submitted by brijal_desai on Thu Oct 28 2021

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