Many jobs that used to be done by humans are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Many jobs that used to be done by humans are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people think that every individual is responsible for their happiness, but people believe there are other external factors that influence us. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

new technologied and ways of buying and seling are transfoming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agreeor disagree with this opinon.

Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think that it is a waste of valuable money.

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.