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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Convincing
children
 that hard work makes everything possible is popular in some nations.
This
 message can be advantageous to
children
 as it motivates them and encourages them to chase their dreams. On the one hand,
this
 message is
benificial
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beneficial
 to the young generation in many ways.
Children
 usually have a lot of
dream
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 since they are a child and they think everything is possible.
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encourage
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 of their parent, it
push
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 them to be more confident to pursue and believe their passions.Another benefit is
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 the
children
 encouraged even when they fail. In
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, If they were taught that persistence and hard work will get them through,they won’t give up and will stay motivated.
On the other hand
,
children
 may have some problems when they believe
this
 message.
Firstly
, they may set
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unrealistic goals for themselves when they believe everything is possible.
For instance
, they may think they can become millionaires at the age of fifteen and when they reach that age, they didn’t get what they wanted .
Secondly
,
children
 may push themselves to their limits and work too hard which affects them negatively.
This
 can
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 negatively when
children
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 free time to study
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 because they want to achieve their goals so they have to be the top student and it can make them suffer from
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 like depression, isolation and anxiety. To conclude,
although
 it is beneficial to tell
children
 that working hard towards a goal but it
also
 can cause them issues
such
 as frustration and burnout.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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