Too much attention is paid to and too much money is spent on keeping pets, while people throughout the world are starving. Discuss the arguments for and against keeping pets. To what extent do you agree?

At the present time, many
people
have
pets
and there are more kinds of
pet
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pets
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available in the market than in the past.
However
, someone may claim that raising
pets
is
waste
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of money and time. The money spent for them should be donated to the poor who can not find even their meals. From my perspective, there are both advantages and disadvantages
in
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keeping
animals
. For some
people
,
pets
can bring great benefits
to
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them
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. In my case, if it is not necessary, I prefer not to keep
pets
in my house. Many
people
love to have
pets
because they can bring happiness to their families.
For example
, most
of
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people
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feel
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and may show less aggressive
behaviors
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when they have
pets
, especially, dogs, which most of them are friendly.
Moreover
, some
people
may need
pets
because of necessity.
For instance
, disabled
people
such
as the blind may need a guide dog. Elderly
people
who live alone may need
pets
to reduce their loneliness.
Nevertheless
, the disadvantages are
also
obvious that there are extra costs and time for raising them. On top
at
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that,
animals
can bring dangerous diseases and harm their owners. For
examples
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, some kinds of dogs bite children because of unclear reasons.
In addition
,
pets
can disturb
people
in houses or their
neighbors
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too
for example
when they make noises at night. In my opinion, raising
animals
is suitable only for someone. As I mention above, disabled
people
, elderly
people
and some families need
pets
because they can
fulfill
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the gap in their lives.
However
,
although
their advantages are great, the drawbacks of having them are
also
needed to be considered. The increasing risks when
people
keep them
such
as diseases, injuries and disturbances can destroy lives or
relationship
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.
Then
, there are enough reasons for ordinary
people
including me to not have
pets
. In conclusion, for most
of
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people
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the people
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, there
are
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more harm than good to raise
animals
but there may be an exception for someone who really
need
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their help.
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