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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true this statement? How far colours influence people’s health and capacity for work?

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common sense that
colours
 have a huge impact
in
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people
's
mood
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moods
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 and places
such
 as work and healthcare could change drastically how
people
 feel just by the
colours
in
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 the walls.
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 following paragraphs will explain why
this
 is true and how
colours
 could modify
people
's
experience
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experiences
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.
First
 of all, there are
many
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research
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 around the world that prove the influence of
colours
 in our lives.
Although
 the perception of
colours
 is very singular and has
influence
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the influence
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of
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 age, gender and culture, some hues have the common sense of their
psychology
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 effect on us.
For example
,
red
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the red
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 hue usually is associated with passion and love but
also
 associated with anger, blood and pain.
Therefore
, red
it
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is not the best choice to paint walls in offices or hospitals because
this
 kind of
feelings
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feeling
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 could make
people
 feel unproductive or illnesses.
Moreover
, the right choice of
colours
 could improve creativity, happiness and focus. Places that require concentration needs to consider
colours
 as an essential part to increase productivity.
Furthermore
, patients in the hospitals will benefit as well because some
colours
 improve our mood.
For instance
,
colours
 like blue and green are always associated with calm and wellness. These
colours
 are associated with the
colours
 we have in nature and will help those
people
 who work in
stress
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 environments to feel more
relax
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 and calm, even though the work is stressful.
Therefore
,
colours
 can neutralize some unpleasant feelings we could experience in stressful places, like offices and hospitals. To conclude, I wholeheartedly believe that
colours
 can change our feelings and after
many
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research
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 we already know how
colours
 affect us.
People
 could feel less stress in some stressful environments and
colours
 could help to neutralize those effects on us.
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