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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environment problem

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Nowadays, environmental issues are not only limited to the extinction of particular species of flora and fauna but
also
 include other problems
such
 as global warming, pollution, climate change etcetera. In my opinion, other environmental concerns need more attention to get
an appropriate solutions
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 to mitigate rising issues.
First
 and foremost, all the spectare precious to our environment and they play an essential role in maintaining balance in our ecosystem, majorly in the food chain.
For instance
, if all the carnivores get extinct
then
 the population of herbivores will get drastically increased and
as a result
 of
this
 these animals will harm the productions of farmers.
Furthermore
, if we look at
this
 situation vice-versa
then
 the number of species who are at the top of
food
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 chain will get extinct.
On the other hand
, others argue that climate change is a major problem. From the past few
years
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 the temperature has raised dramatically which leads to the melting of glaciers and become the reason for frequent floods in some areas.
In addition
 to
this
 , the soil is losing its quality eventually affecting the cultivation on
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large scale
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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