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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Undoubtedly, obtaining a highly-paid
job
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 every person’s life. While some consider that having a higher degree is a guarantee of being successfully employed others might argue that valuable insights are more relevant. In my opinion, it depends on
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 occupation an individual aspires to.
To begin
 with,
medical
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 sphere is full of vital professions which require obtaining special knowledge and years of studying. Obviously, it is impossible to examine or identify patients’ symptoms without acquiring education in medicine, and for
such
 a
job
 no amount of work
experience
 is able to substitute that.
For instance
, our body has more than two hundred bones along with various elements
such
 as a liver, lungs etc,
therefore
, these cognitions can only be gained through many years of learning at university.
On the other hand
, not all jobs are demanded
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having a higher education.
On the contrary
, some occupations can be achieved by long-term
experience
. There has always been a need for various services that are provided by a car mechanic or a
plummer
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plumber
Plummer
 and they certainly will not gain anything from enrolling
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 university. To illustrate, a
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plumber
Plummer
plummer
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 enhances his knowledge together with essential
experience
 by fixing or dismantling taps.
Consequently
, none of
educational
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centers
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 would supply students with
this
 particular relevant information, let alone a subject. In conclusion, it is the nature of the
job
 which requires whether education or relevant work
experience
. One should determine
himself
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which option is more significant in order to aspire
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great
job
.
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