Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Nowadays, some people
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for advice during choosing their
future
career. Others, better take a look for their own knowledge.
However
, personally, I think
that is
better to use your experience and choose
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job.
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advice
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from other
peoples
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. On the one hand,
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have their own opinion are usually more successful in life,
then
peoples
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those
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listen to someone guidance. Because, when humans
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their
future
workplace, they should regard only their own opinion.
For instance
, my friend Oleg usually make a decision independently, but he can
also
consider someone else opinion. In fact, he obviously reached
a
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success in
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sphere.
Hence
, nobody exactly knew what is better for each person. In
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situation is better to have
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point of view, because
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such
a
future
career considering, might influence on rest of
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your life
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.
Then
, everybody should definitely choose their own option.
On the other hand
, if
advice
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given
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from the older person, that has already gone the same way.
Then
it will be not unnecessary to follow some
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advice
advices
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advice
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.
For example
, my uncle Andrew has no idea about
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his future
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career. And he
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him
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father for guidance, what is better to
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, what is better to leave. His father was like
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model to him, and he has
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advises
advices
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Andrew to choose the same way - medicine. After a while, Andrew became
second
to none doctor.
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story teaches that
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not always unnecessary to
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advice from
the
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other
peoples
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people
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. To conclude, I believe that before selecting a
future
position, humans do it because of their own
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, no matter what is crowd suggest
them
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. But each person should think about
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other
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side.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • life experience
  • emotional support
  • practical guidance
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • self-reliance
  • personal satisfaction
  • ownership
  • values and expectations
  • preferences and passions
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