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n my place, a new home are needed, but only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build a new home there. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, cities in developed countries are fully covered in skyscrapers and
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 of buildings. Occasionally,
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, personally, I think that
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 idea to allow build new infrastructure in the countryside.
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 of all, let’s have a look for the brand new opportunities, that unlocked after upgrading
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 into a small-town. Afterwards, some people will
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. As the result, thriving
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 countywide.
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, virtually some decades ago, Dubai was
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. To date, it is considered
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one of the most advanced
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, the change comes when the majority of people
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 that they will have
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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