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Men are placed in the most high-level jobs. some people say that the government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women do you agree or disagree?

#men #jobs #people #government #percentage #women
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I was very excited to see your posting for the Application for
“Cost
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the “Cost
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 Manager/
Quantity
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 Surveyor/Cost Engineer” position at WSP. I have been working in the
Quantity
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 Surveying field for 9 years, and during that time I have been a part of multiple
projects
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, including ones that focused on
the
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apply
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Residential project, Commercial Building and Interior
work related
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. I am particularly
detail oriented
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, and I have always been praised for my ability to foresee potential problems and make proactive plans. In my previous role as
Quantity
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 Surveyor in several companies, I was responsible for examining the site progress, preparation of bill of quantities, measurement work, contract administration and several activities that
relating
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 to my field. I am
also
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 attentive to the criticism of others, and I highly value
feedback
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 that will make my
projects
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 run more smoothly. I appreciate straightforward yet relaxed professional interactions, and I aim for that dynamic with all of my colleagues and outside contacts. I sincerely look forward to
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 discussing the role of
Quantity
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 Surveyor at WSP. I'm
also
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 excited to hear more about some of the
projects
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 that WSP has been involved in as well as any
projects
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 in the foreseeable future. I appreciate your time in considering me for
this
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 position.
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