In many societies , elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

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compares the amount of
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,
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, Italy and Austria over a period of ten years between 1995 and 2005. In 1995, Austria spent
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amount of
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books
, while Italy and
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about as much as each other.
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, by 2001, the gap in spending between
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two
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more
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in Italy. As can be seen from the graph, the amount of
money
spent increased in all four countries but rose the most
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