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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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To date,
credit
 and debit
cards
 are very liked and used more than even ordinary methods
such
 as banknotes and coins.
This
 essay will consider both views of payment.
However
, personally, I think that common variants are actually outdated. On the one hand, banknotes can be the unconditional providers of disease.
Moreover
, looking at nowadays situation connected with Covid-19,
this
 way is especially dangerous because on the layer of currency often accumulated lots of bacteria.
For instance
, my friend Ramo got sick about two weeks ago because of probably choosing the ordinary payment method. He paid by paper money in the supermarket, while all his family used a
credit
 card and nobody else got sick, except Ramo. Luckily, he recovered and feels better now but who knows what would happen to another person in
this
 case.
On the other hand
, humans can use bills when they are in
a rural areas
Correct the article-noun agreement
rural areas
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 or nearby. When local manufacture simply doesn’t accept
cards
.
For example
, approximately one month ago, when I was in the village, my cousin Andrew transfer money to my
credit
 card and ask for purchasing some food. When I came to the store, the cashier told me that they don’t have the terminal to accept
cards
.
Then
 I decided to pay by cash, luckily I had some.
Thus
, sometimes cash is extremely useful, especially beyond urban life. To conclude, I believe that in the future money will acquire a completely new form of life and their use will be more comfortable. Following that, I can highlight
credit
 and debit
cards
, which are easier to use in common conditions, than banknotes and coins. Nowadays, peoples have only one similar rival, that’s cryptocurrency but
this
 variant, unfortunately, doesn’t have widespread.
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