The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is hard to find
media
companies
that are objective enough when they release the
news
.
However
, most of them prefer to publish the
news
that can make more profit,
such
as something related to a famous person rather than an infamous one. It is not a good thing for society because
people
might be miss some important information about ordinary
people
, particularly poor and unwealthy
people
, so the
media
companies
should be more aware of ordinary
people
. I completely agree with the statement, and I will explain it
further
in
this
essay. It is obvious that celebrities or footballers are the main targets for the
media
company because
this
topic will give them a good rating and more revenue. The reason why it happens all the time is that the human mindset is created to have more attention in something that becomes viral,
for instance
, the transfer saga of Lionel Messi from Barcelona Football Club to Paris Saint-German and Korean actress abortion scandal which involved Kim Seon Ho.
Moreover
, sometimes several
media
companies
are influenced by the
government
policy to neutralize any information that can endanger the continuity of the country or has any collateral damage for the
government
officials,
such
as cover-up a corruption case so that
people
will forget about it. Afterwards, the integrity of some
media
companies
become questionable.
Thus
, the
media
company should have more awareness of the opposite
news
and publish about the life of ordinary
people
.
Therefore
, the
government
or many
people
will acknowledge that there is a lot of
people
who have a hard life and need attention,
in particular
poor
people
.
Also
, there are several persons who are not famous, but they can give a good impact on society, and it can be an inspiring story for others.
Besides
, celebrities or footballers already have social
media
account with many followers, so there is no necessity for
media
companies
to publish
news
about them.
Media
companies
have the right to share about famous
people
’s lives, but we
also
have to underline ordinary
people
because there are so many things about their lives that haven’t been highlighted yet whether from the
media
or
government
.
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