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The graphs give information about average house prices in England and other parts of the world.

The graphs give information about average house prices in England and other parts of the world.
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The first bar graph compares the average expense
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 housing in England and
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London
 between 1995 and 2013,
while
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 the
second
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 chart demonstrates estate expenditure in other parts of the country.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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London
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 is the most exorbitant place to settle down in England.
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, Midlands and North East provide the most affordable housing. Looking at the first graph,
house
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 costs in
London
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 were consistently higher than that in its mother country.
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, the price for an average
house
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 in the capital raised rapidly, starting at 200000
euro
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 in 1995 and in 2013 it
had
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exceeded 400000 euro.
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,
house
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cost
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costs
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 in
London
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 had more than doubled after the 18-year period Meanwhile, housing bills were relatively lower in other regions of England. Sorted by descending order of
house
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 prices, we have
London
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, South East, South Weast, North West, Midlands and North East. In 2013, an average
house
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 in North East and Midlands
costed
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cost
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 around 10000 and 12000
euro
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euros
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, respectively. These figures were only
approximate
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to
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one-fourth of estate prices in
London
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 in the same year.

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