In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In these recent years, most companies have produced very attractive
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and claim that their
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released
product
has a very new feature that other brands do not have
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. In my opinion,
this
will be very helpful for that
company
, but its usability for people will be clear in
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long time. I believe that repeated advertising causes purchasers
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familiar with a brand and buy its products and use them. If its quality
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exactly what they say,
therefore
they trust to that
company
and later buy their new products and even introduce them to others. These companies later can attract new capital and develop their production.
However
, after many years most competitors
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overcome their rivals, may only produce functionless
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just for staying.
For example
, Apple mobile
company
has recently presented iphone13 that only has changed the camera place. Everyone derides it. In conclusion, manufacturing and introducing
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product
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products
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with new
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is so much excellent for both people and
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.
However
,
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the producer
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producer
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should not forget that if they make
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product
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even if it will be new, they will lose their purchaser’s trust and lose their renown.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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