In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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to teach them to behave in a good manner. Some people are very strict with their
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while others tackle it
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by letting them do as per their wish.
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that strictness will make
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more rebellious. A few countries, where
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their
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with
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strict rules to tell them what not to do and what is
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thing to do.
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think that being strict from their childhood will teach them moral values and it will help make their future better.
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, if a child
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follow what his mother is
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, she will try to punish him by
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or yelling
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a kid and thinks that
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time he will remember
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before disobeying her.
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threatening a young child works, it is not a good way to tell them how to behave or abstain
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from doing something wrong. Most
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keep their
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in a box with certain mentality and thoughts. While on other hand, people are treating their
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with no pressure and
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them do whatever they want. As per their thinking, if you keep nagging your
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, it will make them either stubborn or rebellious.
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likes to be told what to do and what not to do all the time, be it a child or
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a n
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adult. At
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very young age, they are curious about knowing the world and different things, so without realizing what is good or bad they just react or behave
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, it is
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how they convey their message to the
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to
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not to repeat the mistake. It
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mean that it should be
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way only.
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, if one's son commit
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mistake of answering back and his guardian
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to teach him a lesson, he can make him understand and even though he did it again, keep him in a corner for a while so that he
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his mistake. In conclusion, being
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to the
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will not make them behave nicely. So it is rather to tell them politely.
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  • discipline
  • autonomy
  • safety
  • responsibility
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • independence
  • boundaries
  • rebellion
  • holistic development
  • structure
  • nurturing environment
  • behavioral expectations
  • social norms
  • authority
  • decision-making skills
  • consequences
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