Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Crimes or social vices are rising threats to the world at large in our present age.These vices are often committed by youths,mostly young adults;These raises an alarming concern to what might be the cause of
this
, and how can they be abolished? To these, some are of the opinion that
parents
are largely to blame, while others
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disbelieve
disbelieved
this
notion, and ascribe the evil deeds to the young devils themselves.
Hence
, the contention arises, are
parents
really to blame or does the brunt goes to the children? Let's delve deeper.
To begin
with, children always fall prey to temptations especially the young adults-15 to 19-, and pressures from their peers causes them to go into all manner of sins.
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ot
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to
this
, when they are caught, the whole consequence of the action must be
remmitted
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remitted
by punishment on them.
For instance
, a
child
is caught bullying another.The
parents
cannot be dragged along because
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the
perpetuator
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of the
crime
was the
child
.It would not make any sense to blame or reprimand the
parents
for the cause.
Secondly
,there are rules, and youngsters are not ignorant to the fact of it; they themselves, are able to know the measures that follow if they disobey these rules.
Therefore
, it will be safe to agree that when they cross the lines they are
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to blame and not their daddies or mommies, except they are
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too young to know between right or wrong
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case
.
On the other hand
, if truth is to be told, there are some cases where the
parents
are solely at fault.These predominant
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of cases are often due to bad character and bad training.The former is normally the
case
when they themselves are the
crime
offenders or they overlook the
crime
.
For example
, a parent can walk into a store and issue his/her
child
to pilfer an item or more than often he/she sees them
pickng
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picking
pick
an item and leaving the shop without the cashier's notice. Meanwhile, the latter is more often than not the
case
nowadays.
Parents
train up their wards with bad vices at home and when they grow up, they manifest with these characters As a whole,people tend to put the blame mostly on the young people while others on their caretakers, but the truth is, it can be both.It will be safe in my opinion, to punish the one's who actually committed the
crime
.In
this
case
,if it is the
child
that is
caught, he/she takes the
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,but
otherwise
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the
parents
can be consulted,rather than punishing them.
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